Friday, February 5, 2010

Flash Fiction Friday - Shouldering


Here. Now.
By Kathleen Kimball-Baker

“PUSH!”
“I can’t,” Ellie whimpers, wobbling on her hands and knees.”
“Stop it, Ellie, push!”
“Oh, God! Help me please! I’m gonna die.”
Beth pivots, faces her young sister.
“Listen to me. The baby’s stuck by his shoulders. You’ve got to ...”
Ellie’s screams split open the night.
A dusky baby slips into Beth’s hands.
Wailing.
Image: "Newborn" by Izabella Casselman
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To join the fun, write any story you like in 55 words (no more, no less).

Then tell Mr. Knowitall, aka G-Man by leaving a a comment
on his own Flash-55 post.

27 comments:

5thsister said...

Wonderful! I just tried this meme for the 1st time. It was fun.

jinksy said...

Enough to make the eyes water...

Brian Miller said...

my oldest sons birth was a tough one...this one got my heart beating a bit for that time. nice 55.

mine is up!

Chef Kar said...

Beautiful Kathleen. I wouldn't be able to print the words that escaped my mouth during childbirth! Well done.

I'm up:

Friday Flash 55 ~ Checkmate

Alice Audrey said...

Excellent. Really captures the moment.

Doctor FTSE said...

Just found your 55's. They're all very accomplished. I'll be back every Friday.

g-man said...

Yikes Kathleen..
Even I'm screaming at this one!
Excellent 55 My Dear,
You nailed this one dead on!
Thanks for this perfect contribution, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

♥ Boomer ♥ said...

Awesome!!!!!!!!! I love this. Need to send my daughter here. After 2 C-sections, she had a midwife deliver the 3rd naturally. Wonderful! ♥

Susan said...

Uh, this made me oddly grateful for my two c-sections, LOL. The scream piercing the night really got me. Thanks for visiting mine!

SandyCarlson said...

Been there. There is no magic quite like doing it yourself. No interference. You and your kid making it happen. But there is that moment when you say, "No way." Then, way. Beautiful.

Ronda Laveen said...

The 55 of life!!

Erin Davis said...

Fantastic! So much in one small scene!

Kathleen said...

@5th sister: Thanks so much for stopping by! I'll come have a look at your blog, too! Fun isn't it?

Kathleen said...

@Jinksy:are you a softy?

Kathleen said...

@Brian: Wow! I witness such a birth. I hear you on the heart beating thing!

Kathleen said...

@Chef Kar: LOL! I swore I'd never say the words, "I'm done. I want to go home now." But sure enough, when I had back labor with my 3rd, the doggone words came right out. So embarrassing. Soon thereafter, Dr. Painkiller came in with an epidural. Wonderful relief!

Kathleen said...

@Alice Audrey: Thank you so much for your kind comments! Very inspiring!

Kathleen said...

Dr. FTSE: Greetings and welcome to my little blog on the prairie! I'm honored by your comments! I shall be visiting yours as well!

Kathleen said...

@G-man: Hey you, thanks! Much appreciated.

Kathleen said...

@Boomer: My sister had a VBAC, too! I was very proud of her!

Kathleen said...

@Susan: Yeah, a little heavy on the dramatics. Thanks for visiting!

Kathleen said...

@Sandy: Boy oh boy, you said it! Way!!

Kathleen said...

@Rhonda: Thank you! A most interesting comment!

Kathleen said...

@Erin: Thanks! That one's been rumbling around for while. Nice to give birth to it (snort!)

Ruth said...

I wish my pushing would have gone this fast, in a flash!

:D

Thank you for stopping by and introducing yourself after Bonnie's interview. It's so nice to meet you and get a taste of your writing skills. Lovely.

Lydia said...

This is a most wonderful 55. I absolutely love "split the night" and "A dusky baby (beautiful description) slips into Beth's hands."

Clare Dunn said...

Excellent. The imagery is intense. Perfect.

I hadn't heard of Flash 55 before today. Will check in regularly, now!

Thanks so much for stopping by my place. So glad you like my artwork!

xoxoxo, cd