Thursday, January 7, 2010

Flash Fiction Friday - First encounter





Because You Called
By Kathleen Kimball-Baker


At his window two floors above,
backlit and rumpled,
he has watched her make the calls. 


You can’t hear me, can you?
He watches her lips.
Can you feel this?
Moist air enters his ear.
His breath quickens.
Everything,
nothing wasted.


You let me in. Why?
 Above her breasts, he traces:
“You needed me.”
True.




Image by HAMED MASOUMI


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To join the fun, write any story you like in 55 words (no more, no less).

Then tell Mr. Knowitall, aka G-Man by leaving a a comment
on his own Flash-55 post.


33 comments:

Larry said...

kool 55 I liked it. I'm up too just follow the link below.

West Side Gangsta's

Brian Miller said...

oh, sensual 55. not sure how to read this, but i like it. my imagination is wandering...

my 55 is up!

Hootin' Anni said...

That's deep! Love it.

HERE is mine --scroll down below my show n tell as always. Happy Friday.

Fandango said...

You humans and your erotic stuff. Good 55.

sarah said...

great 55

Dianne said...

very good, I did visit you back in Dec!
I loved tattoo artist.
Glad you are back
and thanks for visiting my site
you are a terrific writer, please add any constructive feedback that hits you, I'm on a "growth" mission in 2010! (quality not quantity)

Kathleen said...

Too inscrutable again, I see! LOL!!

Clues:
(1) She has a second job: what is it? Hint's in the title, just above the byline.
(2) One of his 5 senses has been missing since birth. Does it matter, though? That one can't be too hard (no pun intended) to figure out. He's found a way to compensate.

Help me out, 55ers, with lines 9 and 10?

Keep it clean, though, I don't want to get booted off blogger ;^D

Kathleen

Natalie said...

I love it - you rock! Although I really like lines 9-10, might I also recommend "A soundless moan"?

clean and crazy said...

i need a cigarette and i don't even smoke!! hot 55!!

Alice Audrey said...

At first I thought he was peeping on her from one apartment building to another. Then I thought he was a ghost. I'm not sure I get it, but I love the way the words flow.

G-Man said...

Oh yeah, thats HOT!
I love a steamy 55 Kathleen.
Excellent 55 My dear!
Of course ALL your writing is excellent. Thanks for playing today, and have a WONDERFUL Week-end...G

Mama Zen said...

That is amazing!

Dr.John said...

Good 55.

Susan Anderson said...

Hubba hubba! Great 5. Thanks for visiting mine :)

Felicitas said...

That's HOT!!!

Monkey Man said...

All the good descriptors have been used - hot, sensual, hubba hubba. This is awesome. My 55 is HERE.

Kathleen said...

@MM: You are so right, and it's maddening! I'm determined to find the just right words, though.
Thanks for the visit and your words of encouragement, MM.
I'm so tempted to trying your 160, but man, that looks tough!

Kathleen said...

@Dr. John: Hey, thanks! All suggestions welcome!

Kathleen said...

@Mama Zen: Sweet! Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. Much appreciated!

Kathleen said...

@Larry: Kool, eh? Must figure out how to up the heat, then! LOL. Thanks for reading. Much appreciated!

Kathleen said...

@Brian: Yay! So glad you liked it and it set your mind wandering. I left some clues for a little more clarity! Don't mean to be completely unfathomable!

Kathleen said...

@Hootin' Anni: I tell you, those characters were yammering at me once they "arrived." There's a lot going on with those, two! LOL! Thanks for the visit.

Kathleen said...

@Fandango: Do we humans displease you?

Kathleen said...

@sarah: Thank you so much for the comment and encouragement. All new territory for me!

Kathleen said...

@Natalie: Thank you thank you thank you. Both for brainstorming with me and for you exquisite suggestion! You rock!!!

Kathleen said...

@Dianne: My goodness, you just made my day. Thank you so much! I think the Tatoo Artist is my fave, so I appreciate your comment. I'd be happy to give you feedback. Poetry is not my forte, but I can sure give you a sense of how it affects me. I love your "growth" mission idea, especially in the midst of raising 3 teens. Come to think of it, that's when I decided to try my hand at some creative writing. Must be the hormones! LOL!!

Kathleen said...

@Clean and Crazy: Ding ding ding ding ding!!! You just won the daily double! Awesome comment! Now I have the courage to write more on this score (I've got a novel in the works with a love scene that's been avoiding getting written.) I think I'll print out your comment and use it for inspiration!!!

Kathleen said...

@Alice Audrey: Interesting images that came to you. I love that the words conjured up different things. As far as I can tell (from what they've "told" me) he is deeply sensual even though he's missing a very important sense -- and he's had to "read" so much from his surroundings, he's exquisitely sensitive, and compassionate. She is, too, but she has given away a bit of her soul. They fill in each other's missing pieces. Make sense? You're helping me sort this out, you know. Thank you!

Kathleen said...

@G-Man: Aw, you are such a sweetheart. I am honored that you found it "steamy." I'm working on it! So thanks for giving us the opportunity to play, experiment, and explore. Very fun!!! You have a fabulous weekend, you handsome devil, you!

Kathleen said...

@Felicitas: w00t! Just the effect I was going for. Thanks for making my day!!!

Kathleen said...

@Susan: Hey, thanks for stopping In Linden Hills and reading my 55. Much appreciated. Love the "hubba, hubba" comment. That's what I'm talkin' about!

♥ Boomer ♥ said...

Fabulous! I'm so sorry I missed 55 this week. Actually had it ready, but I've been battling some long days at work and coughing crud at night! Haven't been up to blogging as much late. Come, spring!!

Erin Davis said...

Beautiful and sexy!