Ring Toss
By Kathleen Kimball-Baker
He gambled.
Toss the ring into the lake -- or not?
She watched, silent, shivering.
Would he really?
Could he?
She’d given her word.
He his.
It wasn’t enough. He wanted more.
Rain fell.
Noises in the woods. Branches snapping.
Voices. Shadows spreading.
The wind picked up.
“It’s now or never.”
Please?
“I can’t.”
He jumps.
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25 comments:
Good 55, I like it.
Thanks, Connie!
Made me a little teary ~ of course, my interpretation may be just that sad. Well done.
I've done two 55's this week. Here they are. Enjoy and have a wonderful weekend.
Chef Kar
You meant something like this, when you said give it a try?
The Explorer
Her frail craft pushed through the rushes as she paddled. Suddenly, along the rippling surface of the stream, moonlight blazed a silvery trail for her to follow in the otherwise inky blackness of a cloudy night. Ahead lay unexplored territory, where fear of the unknown would be her constant companion.
Jinxsy...You need to post that on your blog, then come to my blog and tell me that you've posted!
If you want to join the fun!!
Kathleen...You My Dear are truely amazing!
Excellent 55..
Thank You for always turning out such quality work.
Have a GREAT Week-End....G
Another great 55 with so many possibilities.
He jumped to his death.
He jumped over the creek.
He jumped to do what she wanted.Mine is posted
HERE.
Very mysterious. What was the promise?
this is indeed mysterious. Wonder where he jumped. I hope, not into the river!
You humans and your crazy romance thing. We hope he jumped in to get the ring back.
This is fabulous!
Yes! Take the leap. I love things left to the imagination. 55's are a fun way to find new and talented people in the blogosphere?
What fun! Your piece is almost a poem. Lots of action in so few words. The only problem is I want to read more. Nice image too.
Kathleen: So effective that I had to keep the story going in my own head. Love the image too.
@Chef Kar: Sorry to cause tears. I debated publishing this one. I have no idea where this came from; I just sat down at the computer and out it flew. And then I said, Oh, what the heck, just put it out there. Sure appreciate your reading it and commenting!
@Jinksy: Yes! Just like that. Did you feel constrained or freed?
@G-Man: Thank you! I truly look forward to this! You sure have started a blaze with our 55s! Love it!
@Dr. John: Yes! Some many possibilities. All of yours work. But which works best for YOU?
@Alice Audrey: I'm afraid he didn't tell me. Characters are maddening that way, aren't they?! =;^D
@Mona: If you figure that one out, please tell me! That where the story ended in my head. Very mysterious, indeed! Hey, thanks for reading!
@Fandango: Dragons don't have romance? I'm sorry to hear that. And if he tells you where he jumped, please do clue me in. I have no idea!
@Mama Zen: Thank you! And thanks for reading my 55 and for leaving a comment.
@Monkey Man: Couldn't agree with you more! Thanks for having a look and posting a comment. Hope you'll come back again!
@Sarah: Wow. I'm very honored that you had a look! Glad it left you wanting more. I'll have to see if those characters will pay another visit!
@Bonnie: Interesting! And where did the story go? I'd love to hear!
To all you lovely visitors:
I really debated posting this one. I'm fascinated by the dark things that find their way into my 55s -- but I always have a moment of doubt about putting them out there. So I really appreciate the feedback!
Till next week!
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